Calo Nord: The beginning

It was more than a dream, it was a review of the catalysts that had transformed the meek boy into a man. It always started the same way.

Calo stared at his father’s straight back as he followed him up the stairs into the grey building.
The boy no longer remembered if he stared intensely at his father in reality but in the dream he spared no glance for the slaver.

“Why ya, sellin’ ‘im,” the man asked as he gave Calo a poke, “sometin’ wrong wid ‘im?”

“Our son died,” Father said harshly, “we don’t need this one anymore.”

“How old is he?” the slaver asked disinterestedly with a fat finger poised over the data pad.

“How would I know?” Father said staring at the wall behind the slaver.

“Well,” the man said suspiciously, “wouldn’t he be the same age as yer son, if he’s a boy’s companion an all.”

“Yes, I suppose. He’d be eleven then.”

“Special ordered?” the man said with a raised eyebrow.

“What?”

“He has the look of an engineered type, made short for the sport.”

“No,” Father said sullenly then paused for a moment, “Nothing about him was as ordered,” He spat.

The slaver was quiet for a few moments. “Fine. I’ll take him.” 

The man, Calo Nord, shifted in his sleep. Not many sentients without wings would have the nerve to sit on the perch that he had chosen for his doze. The dream continued to the day he lost Emaline, his only friend.

“I’ve heard the whispers, Calo.” She said in her little girl’s voice.
Emaline had been a raggedly child who looked about six when she’d arrived. Somehow she’d transformed into a womanly figure in two scant years.

Calo had never mistaken her for human but neither of them had ever put a name to her race. Her skin, which she carefully kept grey in the presence of the bosses, reacted to her moods. For a boy who’d always hidden his emotions deeply she was truly fascinating.

“What whispers?” he asked neutrally.“That farmer, the one that saw us talking, he’s gambling with Boss Gassom. I’m the prize.”

Calo remembered the hunger he’d seen on the young man’s face. “He won’t beat Gassom.” Calo said with more assurance than he felt. “Even if he does, he won’t live to collect you. You know what a temper Gassom has.”

“I’ve heard he’s on probation, the governor is looking for an excuse to throw him off the Haven.”

Calo shook his head, “I have a bad feeling about this,” he said grimly.

“It might not be so bad,” she said dreamily, “a farmer’s woman may work hard, but I’d have some freedom.”

Calo remembered the farmers face again, the hunger had been tinted with avarice not longing. “Don’t be stupid,” he said harshly, “as soon as he knows all you can do, he’ll sell you to a high priced fun house and never look back.”

Emaline looked down, the excited pink pulsing skin tones faded to grey.

Calo gave her a gentle punch on the shoulder, in apology.

She looked back at his face and smiled forlornly.

“We’d better scurry,” he said, “they’d think the worst if they found us together.”

Emmy’s skin rippled with color visible even in the dim light—her version of a giggle. She nodded.

An hour later Boss Gassom hauled her off her pallet and dragged her out to the compound. All the slaves stood perched at the windows, Calo risked slipping out the door and under one of the trailers.

The boss was drunk and angry. “This whore has been flirting with the locals,” he shouted, “and some fool thinks he has just won his heart’s desire in a game of pazaak.”

Emaline was pale grey. She shrunk away from the drunken slaver. He shook her violently—slight sharp bursts of violet appeared on her skin. The slaves gasped.

Calo worked his way around the compound with some half formed intention of stopping the boss when the man pulled out a blaster.

“ I never lose,” he screamed angrily then he shot Emmaline in the stomach. Her skin turned violet, then darken to pitch black as she tumbled backward then lay still.

“A metamorph,” the Boss said stunned then he roared it, “a metamorph! That bastard knew.” Then Gassom threw Emmy’s body over his shoulder and marched out of the compound.

Calo heard later that he’d killed the farmer too but the governor didn’t throw him out of Haven. 

Calo Nord opened his eyes to peer down at the servants moving about their evening routines. He grunted a little then closed his eyes again. The last dream was the shortest, always.

 

Gassom had chosen his victim badly today. In the six years he’d spent in the compound Calo had put on very little height but a great deal of bulk. The labor and the training he’d received had honed his body. The Bosses had begun to look at selling him to a circus as the monkey man.

Gassom was drunk and angry, as usual and he planned to work out his frustrations with his fists. He hauled Calo off his bunk and pulled him out to the compound.

Gassom’s drunken rages had become so frequent that the slaves just rolled over and went back to sleep. Even the guards and other bosses didn’t turn out for the spectacle anymore.

Once they were outside Calo grabbed Gassom’s arms and dragged him into the shadows at the edge of the compound. Calo forced Gassom to his knees and wrapped his hands around the slaver’s neck. As he stared down at the man he was strangling, Calo felt an unfamiliar sensation.  

 

Calo shrugged back awake. He watched keenly as the last servant left the house. Nothing had changed in his father’s house in the years he’d been gone, everything had changed in Calo’s world. The dreams were more than dreams, they were his lessons. Never count on anyone to take care of you. Never care for anything that can be taken away. Killing makes you powerful, it is my gift. 

Calo slid across the zip line to the roof of his parent’s house to exercise his gift.

I like the concept of this

I like the concept of this one.  A lot.  It opens a little window into Calo's world without making it overly dramatic, more matter-of-fact and I think that makes it more traumatic that way.

 The one big thing I noticed, however, is that it showed up later than the other submissions and sort of looks like it was slapped together quickly to meet the deadline.  It feels like it didn't get the thorough edit-job that it deserved.

I think it would serve you better in the future to cut back a little on your descriptors.  That whole "show don't tell" thing.  Everything is harshly, disinterestedly, suspiciously, sullenly... is there a way to show that using actions instead?  Just something to think about.

Well done...

I think this will become part of Nord's background in my head every time he appears, now....he's a difficult character to work with, but this feels very *right* for him.

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Fascinating.

I agree with both of the previous reviewers. It has been likely assimilated into my personal Calo Nord History, and yet, there were some editing things that made it hard to follow at times. Particularly when he's discussing with Emaline. Still, an excellent characterization of a man we know so little about. He was an annoyance in-game, but I found your story fascinating.  

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Bad Title, Good Story

There were some minor problems with the story (I would have liked to know for instance why his father practically sweated hatred) but overall this story had a very real feel to it, as others have pointed out. I thought about picking up this story though I eventually went for the Canderous one but I think you did an excellent job with it.

It's always tough to humanize a killer but it's something I enjoy doing and which I think you did here. You don't forgive Calo for what he's done or make excuses but you go ahead and give reasons for the cold killer he's become. By the time Calo shows up in the game you get the impression he doesn't care about anybody. And if he had a past like you describe here, I can see why.

I also liked the very space westerny feel to it, which reminded me alot of Firefly (though personally I'm a bigger fan of BSG). Futuristic and yet very down and dirty at the same time. Great work.

Complex, and Nicely Concise

You know, structurally, I’m not sure I even needed to know this was a dream. You could probably have cut that frame narrative and made it a prose poem about Calo’s past. The scene where Calo is being sold is wonderfully layered and contradictory. The inconsistency of the father claiming Calo is just a slave companion, that his son is dead, is contrasted with Calo’s identification of the man as father, makes this scene both profound tragic, and paints the child Calo Nord as sympathetic. Here is a child who doesn’t really understand what is going on in the world around him, but who is an acute observer, who listens and remembers, and when we come to the final scene, it’s very clear how much he has changed, and why. We can understand his motivations even if we do not condone it.

Nicely done, and I really enjoyed the scene rendering the death of Calo’s friend. Good descriptions, nice and short, and like Calo, I think it was appropriate that this story was mostly composed of observations and not dialog. It fits his personality and the tone that the story should be told in.

Thanks for the read!
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Wow!

Wow! I'll have a hard time thinking of Calo as one dimentional after reading this. I never much thought about him when I played the game, now I can't help but wonder. It was kind of chilling to watch him transform from an ordinary child into a cold blooded killer. Good job.

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